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The Closet
Author: J Lewis
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(Added on Apr 8, 2012)
(This month 79381 readers) (Total 146410 readers) |
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A young woman becomes involved in a releationship with an older man. Her curiosity into his secrets locked in his closet gets the better of her. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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Rating:  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
d1ll1gaf
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Jun 10, 2012 |
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J Lewis is probably my favorite author on this site, and this story does not disappoint. The story has a solid enough anchor in reality to be believable.
I would like to see 2 things in future chapters:
1) Significantly harsher treatment of the girls. In comparison with previous J Lewis stories this one is rather tame. I am hoping that in the next chapters the pain and torture increase exponentially.
2) The story needs more sex! A dominante heterosexual man has two gorgeous hard bodied women at his disposal, in a motorhome that provides privacy, and he is content to simply watch them service each other? I find this hard to believe.
I scored this story 8 out of 10 because it is not finished but with a little harsher treatment, a few fucks and a clear finish point this story has all the potential of a 10. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (May 21, 2012)
- I appreciate the compliment and expectations. And,just for sharing your above thoughts, I've held back the latest chapter and am revising it in an even harsher tone then I originally penned it. Then again, it's altering the story somewhat, but what the heck, this is the first time I've actually taken into account another's thoughts on how to formulate my tales, congratulations!
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d1ll1gaf
(Edit) (Sep 22, 2012)
- I have just read part 7 of this story, and J Lewis has out done himself! The story has everything I wanted and I have changed my rating to 10/10. Thank you for listening to my first set of comments. Please finish this story, there is so much more to be done to these woman (and I want to know what happens!)
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| Reviewer:
rosemaryj {domin8tor}
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Apr 22, 2012 |
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absolutely delicious! wonderful description, love hearing her oh so confused fears and yearnings - so realistic from my more limited experiences - please continue.......! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (May 4, 2012)
- Your reviews' appreciated, sorry for the lapse of time in responding. There's more to come with different perspectives of the characters.
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subtojim
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Apr 17, 2012 |
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I love how the master in this story engages the sub in deciding her own punishment. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 17, 2012)
- Maybe, maybe not, at least for a while, then again, chapter three will answer that and more. That said, thanks for taking the time for the review, they'er piling up.
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| Reviewer:
greatbossman
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Apr 15, 2012 |
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Another great story from J Lewis. (don't disappear for a year again)You are one of three very good authors on this site.
In the past I always sent an e-mail instead of registering to review. They always bounced back as undeliverable!
Keep up the great work (10/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 16, 2012)
- An appreciative thank you for the compliment. As far as being an author, my rogue style flys in the wind when it comes to the proper structure of a story. I tend to let the sentences sound as if I'm speaking the tale instead of proper but choppy sentences. It seems to annoy some, but hey, they're my stories and that's the way I like to do it. That said, the reason for the disappearance was lack of reviews, even though the stories still carried a significant amount of readers it seemed the only critic was JJ, who happens to be the best of the lot. (and without a doubt the most articulate) I'm glad you took the time to register, thanks again. ps... Seems my idea's working now, the reviews are almost overwelming.
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bobanddianne
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Apr 15, 2012 |
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Fascinating opening
Eagerly awaiting future developments (10/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 15, 2012)
- What can I say but, thanks! I've got more reviews with this single chapter then my last dozen stories combined.(And surprisingly high scores) Thanks again, like stated below, the amount of a following one can develope and getting reviews, pro or con are the rewards for posting on this forum. Thanks again, part 2 has been submitted, and 3's ready.
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| Reviewer:
davewakely
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Apr 15, 2012 |
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Perfect tension builder (10/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 15, 2012)
- Seems I'm getting even more then imagined in reviews. Also a 10 for just the short beginning is highly appreciated. Thanks.
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sub_Miss64
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Apr 14, 2012 |
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yes please keep going!!!! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 15, 2012)
- Thanks for your time in reviewing. The next chapter has been submitted. Special thanks for the 10...
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| Reviewer:
Scarion
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Apr 12, 2012 |
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I look forward to reading the next chapter, though I think this story might be just as good as a stand-alone, IE. letting our own fantasy complete it. --- Scarion (9/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 13, 2012)
- Thanks for the compliment. Each chapter should stand as its own seperate, yet related story if done properly. Hopefully you'll feel the same with the next episode. Thanks again for taking the time to acknowlege my efforts.
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| Reviewer:
Jim
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Apr 12, 2012 |
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LOVE THE ANTICIPATION
AND SEE A LOT OF
POSSIBILITIES IN THE STORY
- PERHAPS HE STARTS BY POSING HER IN POSITIONS SIMILAR TO THE ALBUMS
- THEN THERE IS HER FLIGHT OR STAY FEELINGS
- MAYBE EVEN TRYING TO STOP THE EVOLUTION
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TRYING TO SPEED UP THE PROCESS ..
JUST THOUGHTS
JIM
THOUGHT IT IS A GOOD START 4 STARS (7/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 12, 2012)
- Thanks, Jim. The second and third chapters are already completed. The second is still pretty much from her angle, the third, well wait and see. Again, thanks for a review, maybe it can raise after the next installments.
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| Reviewer:
Bonoboat
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Apr 11, 2012 |
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The author shows a lot potential, but this is lacking in story. This story serves as a fair introduction, please continue. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2012)
- Thanks for taking time for a review, but I'm kind of at a loss on how to respond. It's stated at the end of the chapter it would continue if reviewed. Seems your only complaint is its not long enough. Since I've submitted well over thirty tales with significant readership and less and less reviews, this was my way to get some responses, and it seems to be working. Again all reviews are appreciated, pro or con, and there's a lot more to the story to be submitted, so buckle up.
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| Reviewer:
Jack_Bonder
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Apr 10, 2012 |
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Very interesting start and a nice creative idea for her to find all the forbidden photo's in the closet (of course it's a setup, you bimbo!).
Good detailed descriptions too.
This certainly builds up the tension of wanting to know what will happen to her next :)
So I certainly hope you will continue this story. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2012)
- Seems I've gotten even more then I imagined.(reviews) Thanks for taking the time, the next chapter's been submitted.
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| Reviewer:
yrmasta
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Apr 10, 2012 |
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A very good story - well written with an insight into the girls thoughts second to none. I was carried along and left wanting more......
(10/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2012)
- A great review, thanks. More's on the way. thanks again.
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| Reviewer:
grudley
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Apr 9, 2012 |
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A very promising start. I'd like to read more. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2012)
- Seems my request is working out. This story will continue with another chapter ready and waiting. Thanks again for taking a moment to review, it's appreciated.
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| Reviewer:
Bigmaxwell
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Apr 9, 2012 |
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Good start to a hopefully longer story. Builds tension as to what will (might?) happen. Like to see more detailed descriptions of the girls dilemmas. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2012)
- Thanks for taking the time to respond. More detailed descriptions are forthcoming. Thanks again.
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| Reviewer:
jrockitt
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Apr 9, 2012 |
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A well told mystery story. It unfolds at a good pace, and the descriptions of sister's bondage gave me a rise. I'm very intrigued as to how the next part will unfold, now that she knows. So write it! (8/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2012)
- The two rewards for submitting a story are the amount of readers and their reviews. I've been fortunate enough to draw the readers but the reviews have been few and far between. Thanks for taking the time, again as stated below, another chapter's ready for submission.
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| Reviewer:
Ryland
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Apr 8, 2012 |
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This is superb, and it has left me eager for more.
Will our girl exceeds her sister in brutality? Seems difficult, but would be nice to find it out. So I hope you decide to continue this ;) (10/10)
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- Replied by:
tjlewis132
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2012)
- Thanks for the review. Seems I seldom get any anymore regardless of the amount of readers. Another chapter's ready to be submitted. Thanks again and the score's also appreciated.
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