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Going back home
Author: Taylor
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(Added on Jan 19, 2012)
(This month 49659 readers) (Total 56635 readers) |
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Amelia gets caught by Master Leo after escaping for three years. First part of a total Fictional story. Everything is made up, out of my erotic imagination. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
evieisabella
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Feb 6, 2012 |
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I am intrigued and I sincerely hope there is more of this story in you.
It would be easier to read (for me) if the formatting was a little different, thank you for sharing. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
kemosabe
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Jan 27, 2012 |
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An intriguing beginning. Hope the next instalment is a bit longer though.
A little help with the formatting wouldn't hurt either (7/10)
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- Replied by:
TaylorS
(Edit) (Feb 6, 2012)
- Thank you for your feedback on my story! I really appreciate it and I will work on the length and formatting as I continue writing.
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| Reviewer:
SamCurious
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Jan 26, 2012 |
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It all felt a little rushed, but is definitely promising. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
TaylorS
(Edit) (Feb 6, 2012)
- Thank you for your feedback. I am definitely going to work on more detail and slowing it down. Thanks a lot:)
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JimmyJump
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Jan 26, 2012 |
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Nice start to what could become an interesting story. A bit more emotions from the main characters wouldn't hurt though...
JJ (7/10)
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- Replied by:
TaylorS
(Edit) (Feb 6, 2012)
- Thank you for your feedback! I was thinking that as I was writing and I got lost in my own imagination forgetting to write it out. I will work on the emotions!
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