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Cleaning for Master Holden
Author: Sadey Quinn
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(Added on Dec 31, 2011)
(This month 11467 readers) (Total 19600 readers) |
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Joanne cleans Master Holden's house; her work is thoroughly checked and any mistakes mean she will be soundly punished! She must do a good job because Master's new servant girl watches everything in order to learn the new job. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
(Edit) |
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Jan 8, 2012 |
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Using third person, present tense was an interesting choice. It worked well in the beginning, when it felt like the narrator speaking to the reader. When the dialogue started it became a bit distracting, though not terribly so.
You have some 'wrong word' misspellings — the type SpelChek won't catch — but grammar is good. A well-thought-out plot, and a beginning, middle and definite ending. And you stayed true to your story codes. This looks like the work of someone who's written before. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
SadeyQuinn
(Edit) (Jan 8, 2012)
- Thanks for your review, Curtis! This was my first story written in present tense- an experiment for me. :)
- Replied by:
Curtis
(Edit) (Jan 8, 2012)
- Damn, woman! I didn't know it was even possible for someone to reply to a review that quickly. Now checking out your other two stories.
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| Reviewer:
pipsheeran
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Jan 3, 2012 |
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what a perfect way to treat a servent and to show the new girl what was to come, all servants should be slaves and treated like this. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
SadeyQuinn
(Edit) (Jan 3, 2012)
- :) Thanks for the review!
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 1, 2012 |
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A bit let down by the action -or the lack of- but thats ays a lot about expectations versus intent.
"Cleaning For Master Holden" is well written, from an author who shows promise.
Only thing I would polish is the converstations and adding a bit more depth to descriptions of surroundings.
JJ (7/10)
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- Replied by:
SadeyQuinn
(Edit) (Jan 3, 2012)
- Thanks Jimmy! :)
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