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Emily’s Fall
Author: erratic
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(Added on Dec 11, 2011)
(This month 54434 readers) (Total 83222 readers) |
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Emily investigates a strange old metal suit trying to fulfil some of her fantasies |
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semper_mirabilis
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Kira
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Aug 25, 2012 |
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Interesting story, realy like the chastity suit.
You could add some more body mod parts;-) (10/10)
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Beelzebob
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Dec 27, 2011 |
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Love the perspective offered to the reader. Interesting POV. The bondage is diabolical and the author shows admirable attention to detail. Could have stood to play the story out even more though. (9/10)
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IOpan
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Dec 27, 2011 |
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Wonderful story, enough detail to please but short enough to let our imagination run. I look foreward to your next offering. (9/10)
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DomOrSub
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Dec 21, 2011 |
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I'm normally not a fan of far fetched bondage but you created a wonderfully erotic story. I really enjoyed the cruel imagination of the Ruth and way you explained Em's emotions as she experimented with the restraint. It's almost like an addiction giving up power and each time your forced to go further for the excitement. (7/10)
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brace
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Dec 17, 2011 |
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Very well done! Loved the descriptive feel and the daring experimentation. Now I'm just going to have to check for any more of your stories! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Dec 16, 2011 |
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I agree with JimmyJump and vdai. There is a nice slow build up to the story with very good decriptions, then we get to the section entitled "Months Later". This latter section has adequate chartacterization but seemed very rushed. (6/10)
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purg13
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Dec 15, 2011 |
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Very well written - I hope you continue writing. I felt that the length was fine. (8/10)
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vdai
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Dec 15, 2011 |
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I agree with JimmyJump that it did feel somewhat rushed. The section after "Months Later" was definitely the most stimulating part, whereas the rest feels like a long set up just for that. However, overall it was very well written and still stimulating at the end. (7/10)
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EllVee
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Dec 14, 2011 |
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Interesting ideas and well written.
I liked how a lot concerning the original slaves is left to imagination. Or was it all an elaborate setup? (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
juanmarried
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Dec 14, 2011 |
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A nice short story, hope there will be some more chapters (7/10)
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JimmyJump
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Dec 13, 2011 |
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Although "Emily's Fall" pushed a lot of my buttons, I still feel the story was rushed and could/should be longer.
Longer in the sense that Emily and Ruth's character should be developed more, as well as some of the backdrop used (make the dig something ordered by a group of sinister women of which Ruth is part, or some such).
All in all a very nice effort with some (for once) good technical descriptions of the "suits"...
As it is it seems that "Emily's Fall" is a "finished" product; I'd rather see this worked out to something bigger.
JJ (7/10)
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bullfinch
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Dec 13, 2011 |
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Deliciously cruel. More please. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
explwr
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Dec 12, 2011 |
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Excellent story. It says part 1, do you really plan a continuation? (9/10)
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