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Morgan
Author: Nadine Holland
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(Added on Aug 21, 2011)
(This month 27504 readers) (Total 55623 readers) |
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an object of affection gets more than she thought possible |
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| Reviewer:
Dusty Spring
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Aug 28, 2011 |
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Too many gaps. Not enough explanation. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Michael247
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Aug 26, 2011 |
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I tried, but I couldn't get past the first paragraph. The format and grammar is atrocious and it would require too much brain power to actually try to read it. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
Noodlezs
(Edit) (Aug 27, 2011)
- thank you for the constructive criticism, I appreciate the effort to help ... oh wait, you didn't bother.
Although I have taken the time to respond, I do so grudgingly.
The story was written over time, I began writing it in one style and eventually changed it. unfortunately I did not bother to edit what I had written as I thought it would take away from the experience I had.
If you had bothered to read on, you would find that it does change, but you thought it would be more appropriate to read a few lines then comment
- Replied by:
Michael247
(Edit) (Aug 29, 2011)
- Dear Ms. Holland, Please understand that I am usually one of the regular reviewers that provides unusually large amounts of constructive criticism. Please feel free to click on my handle and take a look. I am sorry that you feel slighted, but let me try to explain my abrupt critique.
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First of all, any story posted to the BDSM Library places itself in contention with standard literary expectations. You may not be Charles Dickens, but if you write in the English Language, then by God you are going to be examined and critiqued by some (if not all) of the same criteria that Charles himself was forced to accede to.
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Personally, when I read erotic literature, it is for my own personal pleasure. I also can appreciate that most erotic authors are writing for their OWN pleasure and merely wish to share their fantasies with others. That is a noble cause. However, when I do open up a fellow author's tale, one of the things that I don't want to have to do, is spend large portions of my free time trying to mentally rearrange poor formatting and grammar to make it possible for me to even read the work. It takes too much effort. Why bother? If the author cares about their story, they will make the effort to edit and correct grammar and formatting. Aren't you embarrassed by what you wrote? You may very well have a great story. And to be honest with you, I have always enjoyed good snuff tales. But by making the story difficult to read, you turned me away before I even got to what you claim is the good stuff.
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This story is not irredeemable. And I would be more than willing to provide a substantive qualitative review were you to actually edit and clean up the story so that it at least came close to literature standards today.
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Please contact me if and when you choose to do so.
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Yours Faithfully,
Michael Alexander
(www.michaelalexanderstories.com)
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| Reviewer:
Master T
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Aug 25, 2011 |
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sentences starting with lower case letters, the story starts out with"she" and then changes over to "you". makes no sense. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
Noodlezs
(Edit) (Aug 27, 2011)
- Sorry about that, as I mentioned to the previous 'reviewer', I wrote this over time. It was actually done in installments.
Each section was written on the fly and the format and style changed as time went on.
I chose not to edit it because I did not want to change the experience for myself (selfish, yes).
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| Reviewer:
bullfinch
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Aug 23, 2011 |
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A graphic snuff story. (8/10)
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