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The Instructions
Author: pamela
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(Added on Apr 8, 2010)
(This month 18998 readers) (Total 34272 readers) |
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She knows obeying his orders will be difficult and painful, but she doesn't know the half of it. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
thehammerspakeagain
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May 25, 2010 |
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This is the lowest I have given to this author, partly because I expected so much more, and partly because I was genunely thoroughly disappointed. BDSM stories are hard to write, especially consider how one has to balance between being melodramatic, and outright ridiculous. If Kafka had written BDSM stories, he could have been the master of it, and today we would probably refered to Kafkism and bdkf. This short piece of a story, however, is the riskiest in its open flirtation with sentimentality. The story cannot justify why the woman was crying when she does what she does, and one cannot understand why she is terrified to see the man coming in even though the beginning of the story seems to suggest that she is expecting all of this. The holes in the plot cannot be justified. I know it's short, but being short doesn't mean the plot contrivances have to be clumsy, melodramatic and contradictory. And why would the man leave a fluffy handcuff for her instead of a real one? Is this all a game or is this serious? One cannot decide. This story is full of contradictory signals. It simply cannot live up to the other stories written by this author. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Michael247
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Apr 19, 2010 |
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I've never given a ten before, and to be honest, I had to ask myself why this DIDN'T deserve a ten when I was in the process of selecting nine. Obviously, I couldn't come up with an answer. *** I have to start out by respectfully disagreeing with JimmyJump. This story is EXACTLY the correct length and needs a "part II" like most of us need our leg amputated for the fun of it. This was a vignette, a short glimpse into a perfect world. *** Normally I complain about lack of description, and to be honest the author doesn't give us all that much to work with, but like the shortness of the story, the descriptions in this case work with it. Everything of key importance is described, and then you are left with your imagination and expectations. Incredible. This story was short, intense, and very sweet. *** My only complaint is the unrealistic bondage set up. If the author had substituted leather cuffs, I would have been perfectly on board. Handcuffs are actually pretty dangerous, and doing what was done in the story would cut off circulation to the girl's hands, permanently damaging them depending on how long she was hanging there. That said, the handcuffs were an important symbolic part of the story that I think replacing with "leather cuffs" would have damaged. In the end, I was able to set aside my knowledge of reality in favor of the scene the author was creating. *** I liked this one so much I'm going to post a link to it on my blog. Well done. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Malus
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Apr 13, 2010 |
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Excellent. The imagination of the reader is powerful in this story. As ever, pain, humiliation, and terror. (10/10)
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Dryhill
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Apr 13, 2010 |
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Oh come on JimmyJump surely 999. Yes a good build up and very erotic especially as nothing really happens. i look forward to more, especially to find out why she screams when she see's who it is. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Apr 12, 2010 |
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Agonizing start, in the sense that the reader --yours truly in this case-- runs out of chair after just a paragraph, because of shuffling forward right to its edge... because the build-up is perfect, as is the tone and creation of the atmosphere, although not much is happening, no names or backgrounds have been reveiled. Yet this opening speaks volumes nevertheless.
I just hope Pamela doesn't leave us with this teasing "One..." and that the neatly typed page goes on til at least "99..." or some-such...
JJ (10/10)
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