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Slave's First Anal
Author: Fred C. Pierce
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(Added on Aug 16, 2007)
(This month 10755 readers) (Total 23814 readers) |
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Master takes slave for a ride in the country on His motorcycle, ending in a scene in the woods. |
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| Reviewer:
suspira
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Aug 22, 2007 |
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Enjoyed it very much :)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 19, 2007 |
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very nicely done, does needsome proof reading but that did not take away from the sstory itself for me (8/10)
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donriser
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Aug 17, 2007 |
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I think you told a wonderful story. No, it wasn't grammatically or stylistically perfect, but I was hooked right away and didn't want to stop reading. I would definitely recommend it to others. Will make a good fantasy of how my own first time might be. Thank you for taking the time to write it and the risk to share it. (8/10)
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heycarrieanne
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Aug 17, 2007 |
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You should educate yourself about paragraphs and what constitutes one! You can have a great idea, but it won't shine without proper writing skills. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Piers
(Edit) (Aug 22, 2007)
- Yeah, sorry about the paragraph thing. I'd written it in a non-compatible format. When I reformatted, I forgot to go back over it. I appreciate the criticism, it reminded me to never take anything for granted. :)
- Replied by:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) (Aug 22, 2007)
- can you tell i teach? LMAO
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