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Bad End
Author: Razor7826
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(Added on May 8, 2007)
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Short stories that tell the bad endings that befall many innocent women and failed heroines. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Jun 4, 2008 |
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I agree with heycarrieanne that the idea of the little stories is good, and you do post enough of them at once to be satisfying, but I just don't like the way you write. It's too simple; there's no nuance. This is something that can improve with practice. You're certainly not hopeless, as some other writers I've subjected myself to tonight. It's interesting how you manage to write to a formula, but still have each situation be different.
Edit: Parts eight and nine were improvements. Score increased. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Razor7826
(Edit) (Jun 5, 2008)
- Thank you very much for updating the score. I appreciate you giving my writings a second chance.
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mkemse
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Jan 2, 2008 |
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average at best (6/10)
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TheVariableX
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Nov 7, 2007 |
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I liked the first story and I think the format in general can work. I had some more points about the story on a post in the forums
http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/forums/showthread.php?p=495343&posted=1#post495343 (7/10)
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crikey_2004
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May 11, 2007 |
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I enjoyed this little story. It get to the point very quickly without missing out on the emotions of the main character. Well done. I hope there'll be more! (7/10)
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heycarrieanne
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May 10, 2007 |
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I enjoyed the first story, but the second wasn't as hot. But the idea of writing little stories like these is a good one! (6/10)
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- Replied by:
Razor7826
(Edit) (May 12, 2007)
- Endings 3-7 have been submitted, but not yet posted on the webpage. In the mean time, they can be checked out in the Erotic Prose section of the forum.
Chapter 2 is a slightly-modified collation of one possible outcome of my story "The End of the World As We Know It" at CHYOO.com. That chapter worked well in the original form, but I don't think it translated well, and is probably the worst of the 7 I have submitted so far.
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street0
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May 9, 2007 |
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I enjoyed the brief vignettes. They were brief but suggestive. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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May 9, 2007 |
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Both stories would be a good first chapter, but it fails to work for me, in this style (4/10)
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