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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
| Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
(Edit) |
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Feb 16, 2009 |
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First of all, it must be pointed out that the formatting isn't always the author's fault. The site seems to have its own little mind on that, sometimes.
Also, the broad expantion can be circumvented by copying the story to notepad. The format will be adjusted to that of the original as intended by Brittany. Since it does, Miss Heart has no fault in the awkward format on the site.
And yes, the story's fluency is quite hampered by innumeral errors, but that doesn't take away anything from its deliciousness.
I thought things were handled very well and the tale was a delight to read.
JJ (9/10)
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schoolboylv
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Aug 30, 2006 |
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Should be a 1 or 2, but your idea isn't bad, just the grammar and format. Please get an editor and look at the format to the other stories. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Aug 30, 2006 |
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An interesting attempt at being different. Sadly, it didn't make the cut as 'different", just 'strange'. Formatting is a concern easy to fix. Punctuation is somewhat harder; several places you absolutely had to have a semi-colon you had commas. And we won't even go into making your verbs and adverbs agree, tenses, or persons matching; there is a limit to size of reviews.
While you have some fresh thoughts, you get buried in words. If someone takes all her clothes off, OF COURSE it leaves her 'bare naked'. Redundencies aren't cute, just boring, when it happens again and again.
I encourage you to write again! Perhaps next time, however, with the help of an editor. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdanials
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Aug 29, 2006 |
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A synopsis and improved formatting for the the last 3 cities would have really helped. Otherwise a good read. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 29, 2006 |
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you need a synposis to draw readers in (6/10)
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- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Feb 16, 2009)
- No it doesn't. You are a perfect example, because you did get drawn to it, didn't you?
JJ
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| Reviewer:
scoripo49
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Aug 29, 2006 |
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I enjoyed the story on England, but auther needs
to go back and fix the other three story for format. After the first few line I stopped reading
because I didn't feel like moving my screen to finish reading each line. (7/10)
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