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Sis and I
Author: Rabbit1
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(Added on Aug 27, 2006)
(This month 51579 readers) (Total 61088 readers) |
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His sister breaks up with her live in boyfriend --and he goes to confort her. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
slvWriting
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Jun 2, 2007 |
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First of all, I qualify this as an 8 - Very good in terms of Internet fiction. And it is a very good description of this story.
I agree with other reviewers that you could correct those several misspellings and not so many grammar errors, but that's up to you. My rating wouldn't change if you did so, but the story would be more "readable".
Even though I do not like incest at all, I got myself to read this story and I found a pretty good story told from a first person POV with excellence. It was the best 1st person POV stories I've read in a while. The plot is simple, predictable, doesn't incorporate many new things, but the way it was told made it worth its rating. Excellent word choices and exquisite storytelling. A simple but good enough plot and a few, sometimes distracting, misspellings. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Sep 12, 2006 |
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Great story, somewhat romantic, but I loved to read this erotic description. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Rabbit1
(Edit) (Sep 12, 2006)
- thanks I am glad you enjoyed it
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| Reviewer:
Mistress M
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Sep 2, 2006 |
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It was hot and romantic. Since you admit it is one of your early stories, I can understand some of the grammer, punctuation issues. You wrote this story for yourself and those kind of stories make for very hot reads.
Are there any stories here you got paid for? If not, I look forward to reading those. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Rabbit1
(Edit) (Sep 2, 2006)
- if you look hard enough you can find errors in any thing ---the whole point of the story was to let out a fantasy --there are several more parts to this story ---and I am undecided on weather to publish them here---if I wanted to listen to complains ---I would listen to my exwife
Thank you for taking the time to review the story ---and for the allowances for the grammar errors
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| Reviewer:
Polecat
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Aug 28, 2006 |
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Pretty good Rabbit Pretty good.
(8/10)
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- Replied by:
Rabbit1
(Edit) (Aug 29, 2006)
- Well you see when the story was writen ---like I said it was one of my first attempts---fortunatly I posted it on a more author frendly site and got good reviews --than encouraged me to write more and get better
Does make me wonder if I should bother to publish part two and three ---
Now I do it for a living ---having published 5 non-erotic novels and working on number 6---so this was more or less to let the new authors know not to get discouraged if they get a bad review ---most of the reviewers do not know how to review a story ---and maybe they can not read too well either---lol
- Replied by:
schoolboylv
(Edit) (Aug 29, 2006)
- Maybe if you stopped bragging Rabbit about your great story that is making you so much money people would review your story as a novice story rather than a professional published story.
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Rabbit1
(Edit) (Sep 2, 2006)
- schoolboylv---funny I do not see one story you wrote --is it true those that can do --the ones who can't complain---after looking over your reviews ---guess there is not much you do like ---or do you only write reviews to complain ---you see I was not bragging --I teach a course in writing ---which is more than you can do ---I am also the administrator of this site ---and from what I see your reviews border on flaming-- why not try to encourage writers than to tear them down ----or is that what you live for ---to complain--if you are looking for War and Peace here I doubt you will find it, Try your local Library --then complain to them if you see a typo
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 27, 2006 |
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for an older story it is very well done will you and the theme is not one of those that has been over killed good job (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
schoolboylv
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Aug 27, 2006 |
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Spelling and grammar errors make this a below avg story. The plot is nothing that hasn't been done before, but the errors make it almost unreadable. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
Rabbit1
(Edit) (Aug 28, 2006)
- lol so funny --it is published on several other sites and not one mention of spelling or grammar errors are mentioned ---glad I did not publish them here first as I would have really been discouraged ---
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Aug 27, 2006 |
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Not a bad story, but many, many spell-checker and grammatical errors.
A careful re-read, or perhaps the help of an editor, would really increase the pleasure of reading the story. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
Rabbit1
(Edit) (Aug 27, 2006)
- Thanks for the review ---I am happy with the story as is ---as I still get a check every month from the pay site it is orginally posted on --and as I stated it was one of my first stories so I published it as is
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