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The Bull-demon killer
Author: stHell66
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(Added on Aug 16, 2006)
(This month 51753 readers) (Total 59030 readers) |
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The bull is a demon hero,savior of the city of EL Diablo. He uses his cunt,puppy, as bait to capture glory and justice |
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| Reviewer:
J's blu
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Aug 17, 2006 |
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the story line is ok, but the writing needs some work. the grammar and spelling, the use of different tenses and the sometime lack of chronological happenings make the story a little confusing. with some editing help, this could be quite readable. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
badcatholicgirl
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Aug 17, 2006 |
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different, some improvement on your pasted work. I got into the story but quite different. I lik that you get to the point. (7/10)
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