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An Unwanted Boyfriend
Author: Doc Sexaday
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(Added on Jul 13, 2006)
(This month 91722 readers) (Total 145433 readers) |
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Heather thought she was single and independent. Steve was about to show her that she was neither single nor independent. A darkly imaginative tale of one young girl\'s descent into submissiveness. |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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Rating:  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
DaveDet78
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Mar 28, 2012 |
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The story really builds on itself. The level of detail and dialog are pretty great in this (10/10)
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aliciaasu
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Mar 18, 2012 |
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I love it! I love the girl on girl stuff, so me and my partner loved reading this together and acting out some of the parts. The person that wrote this one knows how to really get you in the mood. (10/10)
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missymd78
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Mar 18, 2012 |
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Another outstanding job from Doc. He knows what the reader is thinking and really "goes for it". (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jan 23, 2009 |
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The only thing this story needs to let me hand out a tenner, is a more thorough and accurate mind-setting of Heather. Just to make it more comprehensible that she acts towards Steve the ways she does.
I must add that everything 'clicks' after the awkwardness of the first and second encounter (or the third, if you count their dance).
Well written story again.
JJ (9/10)
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kimfos1977
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Jun 8, 2008 |
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Nice story. Are you planning to write any more? I'd love to see what happens next. (9/10)
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esmire
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Jun 4, 2008 |
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I really enjoyed the set up of the characters, descriptive but not overly developing to bore you. I would love to read more of the story, (10/10)
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kandyecaned
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Jul 10, 2007 |
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very nice
I had to stop reading and..well...you know :) (9/10)
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Good_Grip
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Oct 10, 2006 |
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I don't know how I missed this story when you first posted it, but I found it now and I'm glad I did. It's well written and an easy read. I especially like the fact that the girl doesn't turn into a complete submissive after the first two paragraphs or chapters like so many of these stories. Please continue. I await more. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Doc Saxaday
(Edit) (Oct 11, 2006)
- Thank you! I am glad you have enjoyed the story so far. Heather certainly will not go quietly into the darkness. She has a few tricks up her sleeve... which will be treats for us!
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| Reviewer:
cala
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Sep 6, 2006 |
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Girl meets boy; boy might be a delusional psychotic. A good set up.
This is a technically well written story. Though the characters bother me. I hope the female lead developes some personality, because she's currently a vapid, two-dimentional creation.
(7/10)
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- Replied by:
Doc Saxaday
(Edit) (Oct 11, 2006)
- Cala,
I like the word "vapid". Are you a language teacher? I actually had to look that one up! I think you will like the progression of Heather's character... she will definitly not be a push over and she has a mind of her own! No more "vapidness". (is that a word?)
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mike uk reader
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Sep 6, 2006 |
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What a marvellous story about a prim and proper teenager who is fully dominated and humiliated by her forced boy friend and next door neighbour.
A dark imaginative story at it's wickestly best and well written. Please let's have more soon. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Doc Saxaday
(Edit) (Oct 11, 2006)
- Mike,
Glad you are enjoying the story... there are a few twists coming which should throw you for a loop...
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| Reviewer:
kilmarnock
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Jul 13, 2006 |
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Excellent! I can't wait for round two. You took the time to develop the characters a little and we were able to get inside both of their heads. I like a story where the author leads us inside. Much better than the usual approach and leaves us wanting more. Thanks! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Doc Saxaday
(Edit) (Oct 11, 2006)
- Thanks for your review and rating. Out of over 26,000 readers only five have responded with reviews! It's good to get feedback... round four up and cumming.
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bigcat
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Jul 13, 2006 |
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Very well written. Not my cup but the writing was such, it held my interest. Good depcition of inner life. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Doc Saxaday
(Edit) (Oct 11, 2006)
- More like inner solitude, Bigcat. Thanks for your review!
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