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Misty new career
Author: The Outsider
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(Added on Jun 4, 2006)
(This month 52930 readers) (Total 65562 readers) |
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Misty\'s sisters had enough of her traveling and decides that she needs to have a new career. |
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Average (?):  (2.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
castle2001
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Oct 6, 2006 |
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Only now am I glad that my hebrew lessons in cheder never got me beyond katon and godol.
I admire the effort of any writer.
This story merely needs plot, character and vocabulary. It should reach the mind of a reader who did not grow up stuck on pokemon and cartoons where the lip movements of the characters did not synch with the words uttered. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
barbod
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Jun 6, 2006 |
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Very poor and dificult to follow. Plot unfathomable (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jun 6, 2006 |
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This "story" reads like some gathered ideas and sidenotes, later to be used in a "real" story...
Are you sure you posted the right copy?
In your pre-story comment, you warned us about your poor writing skills, but since you know that, why don't you do something about it?
It's like stating you can't drive and the next minute you tear through the landscape in a Formula-1 racing car...
Learn to drive, dude...
JJ (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Jun 5, 2006 |
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I must admit to chuckling at the authors pre-story comments. Excuses for being a near illiterate don't cut it and neither did this story. What can I say that has not been said already? (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Jun 5, 2006 |
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The codes need to be used and the story made no sense at all to me. It was poorly written and I suggest that the author use a proof reader in the future. (1/10)
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mkemse
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Jun 5, 2006 |
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even your rating of you own story was terible, is english your primarly language, this is NOT to say if you do not read or understand english do not write, but if english is your first and primary language i would strongly suggest you improve on that before you write again
It is like leaninig to drive, one does not just get into a car and drive, they take lessons and practice
I also have never seen a n author critize themselves, this shows me that you do not even like your own work, I foyu post osmething you do not like, how can you expect anyonr else to (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
Tsurmon
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Jun 5, 2006 |
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A piece of advice: Don't rely on spell check! Later is not latter, but spell check doesn't know that. Actually go through and read your story again and make changes to it. It's called revising, and it can help tremendously. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
Trues_Doll
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Jun 5, 2006 |
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Outsider, I know that the want and desire to write may not always equal the ability to, I hope you don’t mind if I try to make a very well meaning suggestion…there are many used book stores if funds are limited to do what I am suggesting, and then there is always your local library…a while back I bought several books to help me with my desire to write. I bought them at a local retail store, which I cannot name here but I am sure you can find them at just about any store that sells school supplies. I suggest you get a vocabulary builder, not just a dictionary but one that helps you find different words to explain or describe the same actions or feelings, etc… this is so you are not using the same words over and over. I also suggest getting another book that helps you with grammar and punctuation, if you spend a little time as I did you can find several that take the time to explain or to help in terms that don’t make you feel like your trying to read a complex college level text. Or you can do as someone else here suggested and check out a writing class. I don’t mean to be insulting to you, so I hope my words and suggestions are taken in the spirit of which they were intended. Take your obvious desire to write and allow it to fuel a desire to learn how with style, grace and pride. Good luck to you. ~ann~
P.s. And please try to use the story codes; they help explain what the reader will find in your stories. So many people here on this site write some very extreme stories and for those who are not into those types of extremes, or some types of sexual orientation or fetishes, they may pass up a story with no codes listed because they don’t run the risk of reading something they don’t like. Or they may get angry at finding something they don’t like and reflect their dislike in a poor review.
(2/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Jun 4, 2006 |
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It's not just the lack of codes--your writing is very stilted and it just lacks quality. If you really don't understand how to write or you haven't been educated how to write look for a local writing class. Most communities have classes that are inexpensive. Good luck! (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Jun 4, 2006 |
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Try using the codes. (2/10)
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