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The Banker\'s Bitch
Author: General Dom
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(Added on Apr 28, 2006)
(This month 18196 readers) (Total 39394 readers) |
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Katie is faced with the prospect of homelessness when her house is suddenly foreclosed upon. Unfortunately, her only hope for mercy is at the hands of a sadistic, powerful banker whom she once humiliated as a girl! |
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littleone_
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Mar 11, 2009 |
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This is a really good short story. I totally recommend it. (10/10)
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Mothbrad
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Jan 31, 2007 |
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Another good story - just a quick warning: there is a /m element to it which may turn some people off. It didn't distract me too much,though. Nice echoes of the great 'Toxic Avenger' movie as well, in parts ... (8/10)
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Satan_Klaus
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Jul 2, 2006 |
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At first I was taken aback by the exaggerated behaviour of the main character. After a while however everything began to fit into his 'comic book' style of evil. So if you find yourself overwhelmed at first, keep on reading. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
General_Dom
(Edit) (Jul 2, 2006)
- Thanks Satan!! I appreciate you pointing out this nuance. All of my bad guys are somewhat theatrical but I admit Forrester is over the top, but hopefully in a good way. His character was deeply twisted by his wealthy father, who was an equally depraved and egocentric bastard. My theory on Forrester is that he is, deep down, still a very sad and insecure little boy --- his affectations are mostly a defense mechanism that he uses to distance himself from the horror of his actions. You hit the nail on the head when you said "comic book" --- this grandiosity and "unreality" offers him the detachment he needs. For another Forrester story, one much harder and more twisted, try "Four Play." It's got some technical glitches, but it's even more outrageous and goes a little deeper into the roots of his psychosis. But all the psychobabble aside, I think it's important for a villain to plainly enjoy himself, and Forrester does that in spades.
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slvWriting
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Apr 30, 2006 |
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Excellently written, interesting story. I don't like it much when somebody dies and that's why I'm rating it 9 instead of 10. Hopefully will get to read some more from the same author, perhaps something more into bondage, humiliation and sex rather than torture and blackmail? :) (9/10)
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- Replied by:
generaldom
(Edit) (May 1, 2006)
- Your point is well taken.... Since this story is part of a collection, I think it would serve me well to vary the thematic elements as you suggest. My longer work is more crime-pulp oriented, so the blood tends to seep through to my other work, even when I don't immediately realize it. Thanks for the comments!
- Replied by:
generaldom
(Edit) (May 1, 2006)
- Your point is well taken.... Since this story is part of a collection, I think it would serve me well to vary the thematic elements as you suggest. My longer work is more crime-pulp oriented, so the blood tends to seep through to my other work, even when I don't immediately realize it. Thanks for the comments!
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Apr 30, 2006 |
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Nice start. I will raise my rating after read any added chapters (8/10)
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slaveneedledick
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Apr 28, 2006 |
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Very good beginning. Hope to read more. (8/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 28, 2006 |
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good beginning, let's were you go from here (9/10)
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Apr 28, 2006 |
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would love to see this story continue (9/10)
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heycarrieanne
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Apr 28, 2006 |
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High school payback is a bitch, I mean bastard! LOL This is a very well-written story. I hope you will continue it. (9/10)
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kemosabe
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Top of the line prose! Only sorry it wasn't longer but perhaps there is a sequel? (9/10)
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- Replied by:
generaldom
(Edit) (Apr 29, 2006)
- Thanks for your time and reviews! This is actually one in a collection of short stories I am currently working on. Each story is intended to stand on it's own as a short, but also to be part of a whole story arc, or novel, when the stories are read sequentially. This hopefully explains why the story is titled with a "7" and also why the character of Carlotta is seemingly unexplained. I plan to publish the whole work commercially this summer, but want to submit several chapters to BDSM Lib as well. I count on your feedback to keep me "on track" with what's hot and not. I was pleasantly surprised with the reactions to this one, especially from a stickler like CarrieAnne (*wink*)--- guess I passed the spelling, punc, and grammar test! LOL
Seriously, thanks a lot to you all! If you're interested in other stuff I have written, check out http://www.a1adultebooks.com. You'll find one complete novel now, another in one month, and the short story collection in July-August 2006. More excerpts to come on BDSM Lib, free of charge.
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