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Caught Smoking
Author: MarriedGuy
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(Added on Feb 24, 2006)
(This month 55127 readers) (Total 75920 readers) |
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Two teenaged girls are aught smoking in school. Their fathers are not pleased and decide a painful, humiliating punishment is just what the two delinquents need. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Derelict
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Mar 5, 2006 |
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This 1st in your series is a great start! Hope to see more! (8/10)
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Mad Lews
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Feb 27, 2006 |
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A great little story of humiliation. the pace of your story picks right up and while it seems you do get a bit confused in places you do manage to pull through without much misunderstanding. I'm sure the fathers were only interested in teaching a proper lesson, one the teenage girls are sure to take to heart (8/10)
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Foxysake
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Feb 25, 2006 |
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nicely done. (8/10)
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La Toya
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Feb 25, 2006 |
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Nice story, and a good set up at the end to keep the story going. (7/10)
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jip
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Feb 25, 2006 |
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Sexy exiting. Liked the story... suspect the both fathers liked it very much! (8/10)
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chksng19
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Feb 25, 2006 |
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Do you have teenagers, marriedguy? It seems so... I think I heard a few of those complaints from mine, back when.
A fresh take on the 'punished teen' story. Descriptions are good, though in one paragraph you don't seem to be sure if he is spanking the pussy or the tits, and in another the man has the ruler in his hand, while later in the sentence it is the spoon.
A fine story. May we wish for more? (8/10)
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tom03087
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Feb 24, 2006 |
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Well written (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 24, 2006 |
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the tory was ok, where my problem lies within the story is the spacing is pooor, to much attention at the begining was placed on the hazzards of smoking, i liked the idea you uaed, just was not thrilled with the way the idea was layed out (6/10)
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