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Weighed
Average (?):  (6/10) |
| Average
Rating: (6/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
(Edit) |
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Jun 30, 2006 |
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ok but not up to par withyour other other posts but still good (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
Backstabber
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Dec 7, 2005 |
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Interesting story, I Have been looking for the next installment. As they say that was a tease. The story itself has some very nice points though. I have told you though you could give so much better detail in your stories I think. I always read your stories they are cool. I have not had a chance to write and I am sad. Anyway I enjoyed the story but I think it could get nastier. I think the reason you got an average is people sometimes want intensity at the very beginning. Your old school like me though you actually enjoy a developed story where things are a little more realistic. I see this story having very good potential. Just make sure the bondage builds as she is sucked into this other world. Anyway great story and I hope you continue it. Take care Traveller and keep on writing. Oh and look out for some of my stories in the future. I hope to have one out by Christmas. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
THE Traveller
(Edit) (Apr 26, 2006)
- Backstabber, I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far. Thanks for the flattering comments and criticism. I really appreicate it. Hope to read your story in the near future.
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| Reviewer:
pejanon
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Nov 26, 2005 |
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I agree - short, chopy sentences interfere with the flow so much that interest level is lowered considerably...
Still - It is interestesting enough - I will check on it when/if new chapters appear. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
THE Traveller
(Edit) (Apr 26, 2006)
- Pejanon, chksng19 and H. Dean, actually the interruption of the dialogue causes for the choppy sentences. I'll try to keep it at minimum in the future. Thanks for the reviews.
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Nov 26, 2005 |
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Choppy, short sentences don't make a story easy to read or enjoyable. Premise was not bad, but story needs development and smoothing. Perhaps a good editor, or someone who would write with you? (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Nov 25, 2005 |
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I actually liked the story a bit better than the rating score might indicate. However, the style of writing was poor and read like a technical manual. Also, so many single line paragraphs gave this tale a jerky and halting feel. Consequently, the story had no flow. Finally, the many spelling errors like "petit" instead of "petite" did not help the flow of the story. A little more care and a proofing or two would have made this story much better. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Nov 23, 2005 |
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I need to see were this goes before raising my rating, this is just the start of the story (6/10)
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- Replied by:
THE Traveller
(Edit) (Nov 24, 2005)
- La Toya, I'll add the next chapter as soon as I can. Thanks for your time.
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