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Indecent Exposure
Author: Al Tyler
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(Added on Sep 24, 2005)
(This month 55845 readers) (Total 74351 readers) |
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A young sensuos woman spends hertima within a highly exclusive resort in Saudi Arabia. She ignores the rules and has to endure her ordeal. Humiliation, bondage, whipping, full slavery. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (3/10) |
Average
Rating:  (2.5/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
jip
(Edit) |
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Feb 2, 2006 |
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When I go to the authors website, I believe the person is Italian. For a lot of people English is not their mother tongue. Before we judge to hard the authors, I would would like to know how much speak (and write which is much more difficult) another language??? Before trowing the first stone.... (5/10)
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- Replied by:
BruceCC
(Edit) (Feb 3, 2006)
- jip, the story was submitted as an english work, and has been reviewed (and judged) as such.
- Replied by:
BruceCC
(Edit) (Feb 3, 2006)
- jip, the story was submitted as an english work, and has been reviewed (and judged) as such.
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Feb 2, 2006 |
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Al Tyler: This story has SO much potential. It's a shame that it is ruined by being so poorly written. An English speaking editor could do wonders with the whole story, and drastically improve it. A shame, also, the second chapter is so very short. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
Foxysake
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Feb 1, 2006 |
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I must agree with the others, your story needs revision; please revise the literacy use and grammar of the story (2/10)
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mkemse
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Feb 1, 2006 |
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need more to real pass fair judedment, but a good start, aferre-reading it, i say pleaee improve or do not repost a second chapter
I hadto redo my review, after reading the synopsis, which was soo poorly written, i wrote off the rest of the story the 2nd time (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Sep 27, 2005 |
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This is a classic 2/10: carelessly written,
tepid, and pointless. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
La Toya
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Sep 26, 2005 |
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Poor writing skills. I find it hard to believe English is you first language (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Sep 26, 2005 |
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I sincerely hope that English isn't your first language. This story is just bad from every angle of the English language. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
abdul
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Sep 24, 2005 |
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Writing skills bordering on illiteracy seems right on the mark. Sorry. (1/10)
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