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Gaining Mary
Author: Hector
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(Added on Apr 26, 2004)
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A highschool girl is caught watching one of her teacher being abused by a rough Master. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
lilrrh
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Apr 19, 2006 |
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looking forward to reading more. (9/10)
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BigCat
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One hot little story. (9/10)
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Jun 24, 2004 |
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Stunning and well written, but must be continued. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
DarkPen
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Jun 15, 2004 |
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This is really good reading. Quite erotic. I'm glad that the mind control aspect hasn't been used as an easy out to get charactors to things that are, well, out of charactor.
I hope there's more to it soon! (9/10)
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mkemse
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May 6, 2004 |
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liked the idea, this one was a toughy to rate (6/10)
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woolfighter
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May 1, 2004 |
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I like the plot and the timing. Go on. (8/10)
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Mothbrad
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Apr 28, 2004 |
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I agree with some of what Lex wrote about the story, except I give it a higher rating because I found the writing, pacing and content right up my alley. I actually thought the mind reading was a nice touch, and wasn't overplayed. I really look forward to seeing where it goes in the future, but I also thought there was enough in this installment to more than just 'whet my appetite' - it was a full meal! (8/10)
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lex ludite
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Apr 27, 2004 |
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This is an excellent beginning with some interesting possibilities. I do like Mary, she's my kind of teen. Nathan is sufficiently nasty in his role of teacher, but the mind reading bit puts this story off-kilter. Why is this hard to swallow power he possess necessary? On another matter the author has fallen into the trap of Spell Check. Like all soft wear, it does exactly what it's told to due, in this case make sure theirs no misspelled wards. Finally the author has committed one sin that is unpardonable to many reviewers; being coy, or is it cute? You either have a story or you don't have a story! This site is littered with the hulks of "stories" that began auscipiously and then floundered because the author never had more than that one chapter to post. You have yet to demonstrate that you are the second coming of Harry Berg or one of the other major suppliers of high grade filth that grace this site, so why should I shower you with praise for what is just the beginning of a lengthy tale? This story has the potential to be very good. I certainly would agree that adding Mary's stepmother to the mix would be an outstanding plus for any future installments, if you ever get around to writing them. By the way is it Nathan or James, or did I miss something in translation? As the story is fleshed out further my rating will reflect its progress. Consider this initial rating a bookmark for future reference, and nothing more. (6/10)
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