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Alright So I Was Wrong
Author: Pagan
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(Added on Jan 18, 2004)
(This month 64115 readers) (Total 112481 readers) |
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Sometimes sex games can go wrong. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Mar 14, 2006 |
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Interesting story of a couple that wants more.. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Nuditarian
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Apr 7, 2004 |
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Good, could have been longer. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Wyn
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Feb 4, 2004 |
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I enjoyed the story, but it seemed rushed from one scene to the next. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
GaryWilcox
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Jan 21, 2004 |
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I concur with Lex Ludite-- good work here but needs an editor. I like the dialogue, but Pagan could use some lessons in punctuating dialogue to break it up. Makes for a slightly longer read, but it would keep his great exchanges from feeling rushed. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Jan 19, 2004 |
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It was non-stop sex, so if that's what ignites your afterburners, this will be good for you. (6/10)
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lex ludite
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Jan 18, 2004 |
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The author has a good feel for his subject, does have writing talent and has produced something with more than a bit of sexual heat. However the author is also quite cavalier when it comes to proof reading. I can accept the stream of consciousness writing style since it does work most of the time, but failing to adequately proof read is like sending your child out into a snow storm without a coat. (5/10)
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