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Training Laurie
Author: MrJerseyGuy
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(Added on Aug 20, 2003)
(This month 118666 readers) (Total 199628 readers) |
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An ongoing story of a sheltered girl who is indoctrinated into the world of slut training and BDSM by her older boyfriend. This is a true and currently ongoing story. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
bigcat
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Feb 1, 2006 |
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Quite good. Moves well. No stops here. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dslave
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Jun 28, 2004 |
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It's a good story. Though, I did see it less of a story and more of as an account. It seemed honest which is refreshing. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
gojack10
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Apr 9, 2004 |
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I'm giving it an 8 because it was relatively well written. If it had been slightly more plausible in the psychology of the young woman, then it would have ranked higher. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Oct 15, 2003 |
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Quite a bit of progress you've made from your humble beginnings on the Forum, MrJerseyGuy! I would have given this a '10', but it lacks polish and needs shorter paragraphs (only one misspelling though -- 'forth' when you meant 'fourth'). The hottest thing I've read in over three months. Thank you. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
MrJerseyGuy
(Edit) (Oct 15, 2003)
- I appreciate the critism Curtis. Very appropriate too since I know I tend to be somewhat "wordy" even in regular conversation. I'll work on shortening those paragraphs in the next segment.
Thanks
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Curtis
(Edit) (Oct 19, 2003)
- My mistake for not being clear enough. I wasn't suggesting you be less wordy -- I was suggesting that some of your big paragraphs be broken into smaller ones. Sorry.
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| Reviewer:
jbowler65
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Oct 10, 2003 |
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Great story. We enjoyed it very much. We can't wait to see what's next. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
MrJerseyGuy
(Edit) (Oct 10, 2003)
- Thanks so much for reading. I actually have some plans for this weekend (it's Friday!) that I'll be writing about next week. Glad you liked it...I know we did!
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Oct 1, 2003 |
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Has what it should have (9/10)
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MrJerseyGuy
(Edit) (Oct 2, 2003)
- Thanks so much for the kind words. Part of the thrill of this is writing about it. It's really neat to have so many people sharing this adventure with us.
I just added the first half of Part 5 today. I hope you keep reading!
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| Reviewer:
object7
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Aug 25, 2003 |
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A great start! can you keep it up? Give us more soon! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
MrJerseyGuy
(Edit) (Aug 26, 2003)
- I've submitted part 2, just waiting for it to appear. The problem is that we can only get into serious play every 2 weeks so that is probably how often I can update if I'm to keep it real. Thanks for the kind words!
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| Reviewer:
cherrylane
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Aug 22, 2003 |
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Best story I've read in years! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
countrygirl9662
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Aug 20, 2003 |
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This story was a turn on for me. The first step is always the hardest and this girl has it going on! (7/10)
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- Replied by:
MrJerseyGuy
(Edit) (Aug 21, 2003)
- Thank you for the review. I just submitted the story tonight and it is a true and ongoing story. I expect much more to come...or should I say "cum"
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