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Hard Day At The Office
Author: Jon Anderson
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(Added on Oct 17, 2002)
(This month 9189 readers) (Total 25244 readers) |
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Staff are happily working at the office when suddenly gunmen burst in and take over. They humiliate the staff and force female workers to perform unspeakable acts. |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 1, 2005 |
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the errors do not bother me, the story has eveything i expect with the theme you used and codes, my hope is that you will not leave it hanging and add 1 more chapter anyway, or i may change my review, the 9 is based on what i hope is more to come (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
gojack10
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Apr 9, 2004 |
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Stop raping Leah in your fantasies, and just ask her out, Dude. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Oct 27, 2002 |
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The writer has a good basic idea here, and a fair amount of narrative, um, thrust, but unfortunately the story is saddled with too many spelling errors. Some of them would escape a rudimentary Spellcheck.
I have to admit, I'd pay good money to see, or rather hear, Leah's voluptuous 'tits giggle'
I encourage the author to try again, but perhaps to submit his next story to a friend for a quick once-over before posting it. Five or ten minutes of additional editing would have changed my '3' to a '6' or '7'. Good luck.
(It's not too late to correct this one, either; I'm fairly certain that our moderator would be happy to post a revised version)
(3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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Oct 17, 2002 |
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Not a bad story, but a common story line, bad guys take advantage of hostage. Grammar and spelling should have been checked first. Blowse, should be blouse, got hold, should be got ahold, couldnt, should be couldn't, meld, not sure, probably mold. Many more errors. (3/10)
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