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Bad End: Donations
Author: Razor7826
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(Added on Feb 14, 2009)
(This month 52659 readers) (Total 64692 readers) |
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A young woman gets caught stealing from her church by a fellow parishioner. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
grinner666
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Feb 17, 2009 |
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Nice story idea, good characters and great descriptive text ... spoiled by rushing to the ending.
(5/10)
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JimmyJump
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Feb 17, 2009 |
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Very good story, well written and thoroughly enjoyable. No flaws whatsoever (almost) and three-dimensional, solid characters...
The end, on the other hand, takes away half the fun of the story. For as believable as the whole story is, the ending is not. In a small community, it wouldn't take long before someone came a knocking at Keith's door. Back and front.
And stop referring to your characters as 'he' or 'she' too much. They have names, use 'em.
JJ (9/10)
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