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Naughty Pussies
Author: slavegirl
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(Added on Jun 28, 2007)
(This month 45628 readers) (Total 97748 readers) |
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Seven young women develop intense D/s relationships while living together in an old Victorian House. As the story develops, the level of B&D/S&M will contine to increase along the way. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
bobanddianne
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Apr 12, 2012 |
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Very nice presentation of erotic BDSM action (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Mar 10, 2012 |
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Chapter one is perhaps a little on the slow side but good charaterisation. The teasing promise of the future comes good in chapters three and four.
i only hope there will be more about this 7 and their friends/craftsmen (comments for chapters 1- 4).
COMMENTS ON CHAPTER 5:
Against my better judgement i have increade my rating from 8 to 9. The reason i am not totally happy with increasing the rating is because of a rather glaring error. Yvette says she is extremeley disappointed inthe behavior of two subs she bought to the house and that they need separating - she bought Amber and Candi (and Candi does not appear to have done anything wrong), Peaches was already there with Samantha et al. Now I understand that after a a gap of 31 months, and having so many players, it is easy to forget all the relationships. But that was a big error to make.
i also thought more time should be spent (or indicated was being spent) between the three sisters, Daphne almost seems to ignore Daniel - have they been to bed with one another?
Then for me is the biggest error You mention cheesecake 3 times are you trying to torture me as well, thank God it was not blueberry cheesecake i think i would have been eating the computer. But seriously i love the fine attention to detail telling us about the food; which books Daniel was looking for; that the builder chap was stuck in traffic; what the sowing machines do. All this excellent detail really makes the story so much more realistic and reminds me of Ernest Hemmingways "Old Man and the Sea".
i hope we are not going to have to wait another 31 months for chapter 6.
COMMENTS ON CHAPTER 6:
i am happy now about the nine rating i have previously given. i like that Daphne is taking more notice of Daniel and am especially pleased that poor old Peaches is getting some fun at long last.
An interesting chapter in that it is more about the day to day running of the house and occupents, which is a pleasant change. Thank you that we did not have to wait to long for this chapter, i look forward to chpater 7.
COMMENTS ON CHAPTER 7:
An excellent chapter with nicely detailed action, I especially like the the emotions of the slaves. By my thinking there is one bad error, Danielle is going to help run the botique and Dawn is going to do all the computer work and design the website - surely this should be the other way round?
My only big negative about this chapter is that we are informed there will be no more about these wonderful people. Please, please let us have the odd update ....... pretty please.
(9/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jun 10, 2010 |
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A bit of an uneven write, this is. Uneven in the sense that the personalities of the girls/women are inconsistent, going from giddy bubblegum chewing cheerleader types to full-fledged dominatrixes with a sinister agenda.
However, the writing is solid, with some decent storytelling to boot. Just mind the pace, which also goes up and down, from slow crawl to thundering galop, back to a meandering stroll and --whoopie-- another sprint is announced. All this leaves the reader a tad breathless at times...
JJ (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
babydoll{R1}
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Jun 30, 2007 |
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great beginning..i'm intrigued as to how this will all play out..nice job.. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
bobanddianne
(Edit) (Jul 4, 2007)
- Thank you for your comments and compliments. Chapter two has been sent in and the fun begins.
Due to how Chapter two and three (almost completed) have progressed, the title is being changed to 'Naughty Pussies'
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Jun 30, 2007 |
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Just a taste of what to come, I hope. Seems like an interesting concept. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jun 28, 2007 |
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was enjoyable to read, good general theme (7/10)
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