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    Retribution
    
    Author: robdanob
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    (Added on Aug 20, 2004)
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    Evil pair get pay back. | 
   
 
 
   
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    | Reviewer: 
    lex ludite
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    Aug 23, 2004 | 
   
   
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        A decent premise, but the shoddy editing did it in. Plenty of typos, broken sentences and gargantuan paragraphs made reading this short story a painful experience. (5/10) 
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        - Replied by: 
robdanob
  (Edit)  (Aug 25, 2004)
 
        - Thanks for the review.
 I agree completely with your comments on the editing and general technical content.This is my first attempt at writing and I am pleased that the story itself was well recieved.All I need to do now is brush up on my typing, general finishing, presentation and of course spelling.Thanks again, look out for more in the future. Robdanob 
       
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